My dreams speak to me.
They call me out to a dark grey sea.
I stand on the shore.
The foam laps my feet and waves roar.
I raise my arms, flying.
Rushing out over the glassy surface, fears dying.
A twinkle in the distance, my heart leaps.
I know that it\'s you, beyond the deeps.
You cry as you stumble amongst the parts
of decaying souls and broken hearts.
From expression of shock to unadulterated joy
I watch your face and try to play coy.
The act doesn\'t last and my smile breaks through.
I stretch out my hands, so glad I found you.
Our fingers lock and we rise to the sky.
I open my eyes and begin to cry.
Would that I could find you not only in my dreams.
Pain grows, how real it seems
That you\'re merely a figment,
an imaginary joy for me to lament.
I see no happy ending to this life through which I creep.
Wake me if you find me, until then I sleep.
















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"man flies highest on his own wings" Ignore the gender bias - just hold on to the fact that sometime you'll fly too without the aid of anything but yourself. And you'll be wide awake. Trust me - I've been in the pit many times - and climbed out.
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"I tend to get very tense around apples.. Actually I'm always tense and I've just fallen into the trap of blaming fruit."
the last line is great.. 'wake me if you find me, until then i sleep..' *sigh*
Are you really my adoptee???
I have absolutely no criticism for this, which is rare for me... It's beautiful, it has a great flow and you tackled a topic (dreams) that most would call cliche but this piece isn't cliche by any means. You took a general topic and molded it into something meaningful, and most importantly, something of your own.
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